My only nit pic is she listed a handful of the 12 states that already passed similar laws. She should have just left it as "12 other states have already passed similar laws".
Loading the bill up with sever financial penalties and personal accountability to the individual, rather than value of the gun plus legal fees, will probably mean that this is a feel good proposal that is DOA rather than something that will actually be passed. Even the bill's sponsor said he wasn't sure the penalties were appropriate.